http://www.wattpad.com/story/10743653?utm_source=android&utm_medium=other&utm_content=share_reading

This is one way to while away time and still learn in a almost comic way. Tit bits on how to keep writing simple and original. Summarily:
– Reduces Cliche titles, content and illustrations or character names.
– Try to be less obvious especially in your title.
– Reduce use of heavy vocabulary.
– Ultimately, be original.

Your story would be fun to follow after that.